Thursday, 17 March 2016

Cookie Writing

Like the moon, my chocolate chippie biscuit is circular. The chocolate biscuit looks like an egg. Both of the biscuits are hard. It has cracks inside. It feels like concrete. It smells sweet like bubblegum. 


  1. Hello Atawhai, this was a great piece of writing. I really liked the way you described that your cookie was circular like a moon. Maybe next time you could, say what the cookie tasted like. Keep up the amazing work.

  2. A bubble gum smelling cookie that feels like concrete!! that is a great imagination you have well done keep up the good writing

  3. Nice of you to write a nice nice sentence to shar with Pt England school and I uish you have a good happy doy todoy room 24.